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Hug to Akai by AkaiDalia

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OK just so you know.... This is actually my first time typing a critique, so please do not get offended if I point out some flaws. I'm only doing this to help other artists grow and improve. OK, now I will begin!

I see the big effort and impact you made through this piece. The coloring in this picture do bring out the shading and different contrasts of values. Her position seems rather friendly as her expression here. And I'm very impressed with the background colors in this picture. These colors do bring out a lovely vision that would appeal to one's eye.

However I noticed a problem with most of your Akai drawings ...... The problem with the originality seems to lack a realistic body figure. I'm not saying they have to be small and tiny like Sega's style, everyone has unique styles! The main problem is that her wait is way off and too skinny. It seems like it's sucking up her body where it would give her that unhealthy figure. And her breasts aren't even with her lower part of the body. They even seem a bit bigger than her head as well. I understand that you want it to look more anthromorphic and it's a tough style. But I strongly suggest that you study more on anatomy, just so her waist and breasts can seem more realistic. I know she's your persona, but you should think about making her look natural just like you. And it seems impossible for sharp nails to appear from her gloves. So the originality on your character's appearance may need a bit more improvement.

I hope this critique will help you make improvements on your works!
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Elvalight Nov 20, 2012  Student General Artist
This will help me with one of mine :)
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XxMoonlight-1-WishxX Nov 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You mean the critique?
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Elvalight Nov 20, 2012  Student General Artist
Yeah, I just mean good advice and it will come in handy
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Elvalight Nov 20, 2012  Student General Artist
Thank you! (byw, WHERE ON EARTH DID THE CRITIQUES COME FROM? I just pushed a buttom and...)
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XxMoonlight-1-WishxX Nov 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Hmmmm where it allows you to type one.
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Elvalight Nov 20, 2012  Student General Artist
Oh, I get it! :)
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XxMoonlight-1-WishxX Dec 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Glad you do!:D
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